Peach's Yapanese101

Well, hello there. I'm peach.

Today we're going to talk about what might difficult for some, the art of the yap. Dialogue in fics, both in and outside of smut. Now, I don't consider myself an expert in this, but I do think I know a little bit about the yappachino.

Good dialogue can make or break a fic potentially. If your characters don't sound like how people might talk, it might not make an interesting read.

Let's start a scene, with Yujin in the university cafeteria. I won't be focusing on formatting or dialogue tags here, but the reasoning behind it all. Her and OC have woken up, they've showered, gotten dressed and decided to grab something to eat on campus instead of the apartment.

They sit down and plop their trays down, getting comfortable, and Yujin is the first to speak.

"Pancakes again, daddy?"

It's a brief line, but it shows a few things. That Yujin loves to tease OC, this time about his breakfast choice. Maybe she's eating something a little healthier, a bowl of oatmeal. Perhaps our OC loves to just eat the same thing every morning, maybe he has a sweet tooth.

"Pancakes are the best thing they make here, Yujinnie."

Here's the defense. There's nothing else he likes from the cafeteria, or as previously stated, he just really likes pancakes. It's an easy conversation started that can go in any direction you chose.

We continue!

"Is daddy not adventurous?"

"I live with you, don't I?"

Here we have Yujin talking about OC's potential stubbornness to not order anything else, but he turns it back around to talk about their relationship, as if living with Yujin is the most dangerous thing he could do.

Now lets have Yujin turn things around on him, something a little more spicy.

"The closest thing you've gotten to living dangerously is when we sneak off and fuck around the school campus."

It's still a tease, but it's an insult in some ways, almost saying that he's boring. We can continue down this path, or we can just ignore it. Let's do that.

"Yujin, just let me enjoy my pancakes, brat. Is that too much to ask?"

"Yes."

In a handful of sentences, we've told a story, and added a bit of characterization. Our OC has simple tastes, and Yujin likes to get a rise out of him. He prefers to be with Yujin in the privacy of the penthouse, but she likes to be more out in the open, more experimental, more risks. They're two very different personalities, but in this scene it shows he sacrifices his way of thinking for her.

Now, we can continue this back and forth, and as Yujin usually does, gets a little more suggestive with her words.

She's got him on the ropes, and she wants to reel him in a little further.

"Well, if daddy gets tired of his boring pancakes he can have something else to eat."

It's pretty obvious here what the intention is. But will our OC take the bait?

"Such as? Do you have a menu somewhere I'm not privy to? Go could for a palette cleanse after all this sugar."

He doesn't. Not right away. Because he knows Yujin and all the tricks she has. So he'll play dumb for a bit.

"Do you ever need a menu when you're around me? I'm the only thing you can't help but devour."

Yujin knows he's playing dumb, but she tries to play to his weakness. Because she knows how easy he is to manipulate, especially when it comes to her and her body.

"Dunno, I think I'd rather have the pancakes for today. Pretty yummy today."

And here we have our OC trying to subvert the expectations. We could go another route, and have our OC get flustered, and fall into the trap right away, but this time he wants to make Yujin earn it a bit. Resist those charms while he can.

"Pancakes instead of me, daddy? Never thought I'd see the day,"

He knows how much Yujin loves teasing him, so he wants to give a taste of her own medicine.

"Didn't you want me to be more adventurous? Expand my horizons, try new things."

"That's the opposite of what I'm saying, daddy. Pancakes can't satisfy you the way I can."

And now we have the full double-down. Yujin knows OC can't actually resist her despite him trying. She's now almost offended at the idea that he would even consider anything to be better than her.

"Care to elaborate?"

"Mm, you'll find out later when you fuck me raw. I'm a really, really good breakfast."

"Here? The cafeteria?"

"As much as I'd like to have you pull my hair in front of the entire student body, no. Enjoy your pancakes, get more coffee. Meet me in the storage closet on the bottom floor, first door on the right."

Now Yujin exits the scene. Leaving OC in their thoughts, to chase after her no doubt. What started as a simple conversation over pancakes spiraled into something that made OC even forget about said pancakes.

So lets move on to smut. Not as easy.

When new writers ask how to write dialogue in smut, I always say go watch porn, listen to how they talk, then tone it down.

You don't want a slurry of "yes, daddy, yes!" throughout the whole thing. But you don't want your characters to be silent either. Unless they're sneaking around in a library or a church, then by all means, I guess.

So we have Yujin, in our storage closet, getting absolutely railed. The classic skirt bunched up, panties around her ankles, just being fucked into the shelves while she reads the label on I don't know, printer cartridges?

We can add our typical "oh yes," "that feels so good," you're so tight, wet, etc" but the real meat and potatoes are what the characters say in between that.

"Stop worrying. I'm not, so you shouldn't be. You think I care about any of this right now, daddy? That I'm concerned with anything but how good your cock rearranges my guts?"

Our OC is a bit nervous that fucking Yujin in a storage closet is going to get them caught, but as usual Yujin is as carefree as can be. She doesn't want him to worry either. She wants him to only focus on his pleasure, and hers.

"Right. Forgot who you were for a second. That fucking in a supply closet is just a Tuesday for you,"

This might seem as an insult for OC, but for Yujin it's not. It's something she's proud of, she's just happy that he's ditched breakfast to come rail her.

"This is a perfectly acceptable location, daddy. Great lighting, no cameras, the smell of lemon wood polish. A girl's dream come true."

This is Yujin at her Yujinest. She knows that OC will just go along with whatever she wants. And to bring everything back, we can reference our earlier scene.